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Teenage MJ and Peter by mikemayhew Teenage MJ and Peter by mikemayhew
11X17 in pencil. From the Mary Jane novels project.
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The tension in this piece is excellent. That is my favorite part about this, the story that you tell within the confines of the page. Your skill and technique is flawless; I scanned the page looking for any errors in anatomy or light sources but everything is really solid!

I do think that the 'spidey sense' waves are unnecessary though, you get the point of Peter's anxiety across well enough by his facial expression and relation to MJ. Unless there is a threat that we (the viewer) is unaware of, why are they there?

If this piece is part of a book (not sure, but I think it is?) is it going to be colored? If so and more work is going to be done on it, please ignore my following comments. Mary Jane is a redhead, the archtype of whatever a redhead is supposed to be, and her hair seems a bit 'blonde' in this piece. If this artwork is strictly grayscale, I feel that her hair should be darker in tone. On a separate note, there is a lot of white space in this picture. It is really distracting for me because the whiteness competes with the other visual elements in the piece. There couldn't be like a painting or window or even a wallpaper pattern to help frame and separate the elements? Again, if this piece were to be colored I think that both the white space and hair color would be fixed by default.

I mentioned the facial expressions, and I mean it when I say that the detail and your ability to capture the tension is paramount. Really good work on the shading, I was never able to figure out how to draw hair with a pencil (or perhaps I was never able to figure out how to draw hair :) ) but you capture the natural folds and locks of MJ's hair well. On the hair note: Peter IS hanging upside and unless his hair is gelled, I would think that more of his hair would be falling down versus what is currently lopsided. His hair doesn't have to be pointing towards the ground, but a few misplaced tufts on the sides of his head would complete his pose.

Excellent work, I will have to pick up the novel when I get a chance. Please let me know if this piece was supposed to colored or worked on more. Thanks!
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xXObsceneZombiXx Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
8D I have this book. This is excellent.
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maironmatos Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2011
Fantastic
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DryBonesReborn Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'd so love to color this. :drool:
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DryBonesReborn Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Dang is that good for detail! :jawdrop:
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Cassie1264 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
awesome :D
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MalevichnD Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010
Твёрдая рука нет слов только эмоции, Super!!!
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Petrosino2010 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010
This Is the best piece That I have seen yet! OMG!
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Petrosino2010 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010
Can you teach me how you make your lines so crisp!?..this one the pieces I've seen yet! :)
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stressberatcreature Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010
nice
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Gyorkland Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010
insane pencil skills man congratulations, what number of pecil did you used?
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010  Professional General Artist
mostly f.
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em-scribbles Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2010   General Artist
Wow, very nice. The shading looks great! :)
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slave2moonlight Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2010
Awesome! And MJ is GORGEOUS and looks somewhat familiar too, for some reason, ha. I must have seen that model before...
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AnnaleeBeram Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Fantastic!! Love the facial expressions!!
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paintitall Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Love the delicacy of your pencil work. Thank you for posting work that both inspires and teaches. My pencils are not this clean yet, but looking at this lets me know where I need to go next. I also love your little boy Spidey - reminds me so much of my son! He's 4 1/2 & wears his Spidey suit to bed almost every night.
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Professional General Artist
awesome! My son just turned two and is starting to learn how to shoot his webs.
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paintitall Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
I love this one. The delicacy is wonderful. Is this straight graphite, or did you also use black/grey ink (it's under drawings, so I'm assuming the graphite?) I've been honing my drawings, but they're not this clean yet. Thanks for posting work we can all learn from!
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Professional General Artist
this is all pencil.
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paintitall Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Will you perchance be at Atlanta Dragon Con this year? I'll be in the Art Show, which is attached to the Comic Artists Room. I'd love to come meet you (and trade pictures of our sons & our art...)
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010  Professional General Artist
wish I was. Loved that show when I attended a few years back. Have fun.
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dimorali Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Wow!! Great job!! I think will join the "i thought it was watercolor Mike Mayhew fan-club". lol!!!
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gforrydesign Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010  Professional General Artist
What pencils do you use for a piece like this? (Almost looks like a controlled inkwash but apparently not...) The control you have over the gradations in shading and it's smoothness is insanely good.
I've always loved this piece (from the original color) and it's great to see the original pencils to get a sense of where it began.

I have to focus on the quality of my pencilwork... especially after seeing fine work like this. Kudos...!
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Professional General Artist
at that time I was using a wooden "F" pencil. Now I sometimes mix it up with a mechanical pencil.
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alexandros-ch Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
sooo smooth...i thought it was watercolor
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Freya-Silvermoon Featured By Owner May 7, 2010
Spiderman was shrink?o.o
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Vonki-Diego Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
I love this one! :|
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Tluaengiad Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010
Beautiful work, my God that is sooo cute!
I like Pete best when he's being a good ol' boy and not a "typical teenager". ^_^
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Simokaos Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010
Great work :thumbsup: I like the contrast between black and white, it's a particular that make the difference I think :aww: I like the simplicity of the wall too, it add more on the contrast itself
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saintvulcan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2010  Student General Artist
oh my god man! its looks like a photo man! how?! i suck at drawing realistic humans
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solidscorpion69 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
The shading on this is so smooth and effective. I'm inspired by your work.
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Dunedain88 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
AMAZING!
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GiP7 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
wow!
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Relient-K Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Oh, wow! I read this book, and remember being totally impressed by the illustrations. Great work!!! =D
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MiBSuM Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Wow! The girl is just stunning! :omg:
Fantastic work!
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BlackStar-okuz Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow! the shadin and the perspective is Amazing :heart:
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situmorang Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
this is really cool.,,
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yolen Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I saw that book! It was awesome! :D
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Iglica Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
amazing! :) just pencil?? Oo
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miktroz Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Great expressions on their face !
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TrentWolf2008 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Very dynamic. I think the best thing in this piece is your use of shadows. You did a nice job of making Mary Jane look young with just a detail like the hair pulled behind her ears. I really like the detail in the turtleneck too. Great work.
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LillianAlyse Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Your pencils are so smooth and fluid!
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comic-coloring Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
the only thing i would crit is that the pullover from peter is to thight on his body,it should hang more done i think . other than that it looks realy great. your skills are realy awesome..how long do you draw now?
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wahmiranda Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Very cool! I like the softness of their shadows. You mixed ink and pencil, right? Very well done!
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mikemayhew Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Professional General Artist
no. all pencil here.
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wahmiranda Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Very good!
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wahmiranda Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Very good!!!
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XRayeX Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010
Lovely! I love how you made MJ look. For some reason in most books she looks kind of harsh and hard, and she's not all that likeable. Or at least that's what I find. I think the facial expressions are great and I love the perspective. :)
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RenegadeStudios Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
Nice pencil work!
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smbhax Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2010  Professional General Artist
She makes his Spidey sense tingle!
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dynamite-rose Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010
Your penciling is so smooth and beautiful. HOW.
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